Strengths: You have page numbers and a picture of me.
Areas for improvement: grammar on writing, colours.
Comments: as with last time i have to add insult to injury despite not giving feedback on your actual final piece. To begin with, have the competence to post your final contents so i get to comment on the right one. Secondly, despite not being your fault, i have to say the amount of bright colours in a magazine of your genre is not good. If i wanted to see rainbow vomit i would watch a children's T.V program involving bright scenery and ponies.
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